被公司评为优秀的开发信,大家点评下

标题: 

Mr. XXX + 他公司的名称 点名道姓和公司,一目了然 

内容:

MOrning Mr. XXXXXX

This is Jack Sales Manager from a well established PRODUCT manufacturer in China. Hope I reach the right person at the right time to talk about PRODUCT cooperation and strategies for your company 

I did a little bit research on your company and I’m sure you would be continuously looking at opportunities to expand your product supplying scope/services and make it as the brand to own your company reputation in the PRODUCT market and increase your market return with your constant efforts.

We can fulfill any of your business needs and maximize your business profits compared with lots of PRODUCT manufacturers as we are newly launching DDDD brand PRODUCT in international market.

Our business reference includes 20 years appointed OEM for EU USA PRODUCT manufacturers

Approvals from .......(主要客户,最好是国际同行知名企业)…70%~80% products for international application (for more details please contact us) 这个地方用黄色文字背景,突出公司优势

As the GM of 客户公司名称 it is your responsibility to find a sustainable and trustworthy business partner relationship and ensure a promising company future. 

我的公司 is interested in cooperating with you to uncover the PRODUCT demand of 客户市场 market from now on. As you have experiences in PROCUT it would be easier to seize the opportunity to win great PRODUCT demand in 客户市场。

这里很明显的标示你的合作意图和对客户公司的了解及所联系人的职责所在,没有人会反对你强调他的职责和利益 

Hope to have your excited feedback TODAY.
Thanks ards 
JACK

24 hours available for you

有什么意见或者建议都可以回复下。

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  • S-H
    S-H

    我到现在都没看完,这种会被直接删除的

    2017-04-15
  • 菲雯爸爸
    菲雯爸爸

    这是N年前的优秀开发信吧

    2017-04-14
  • 战胜命运
    战胜命运

    我也觉得这个需要精简,客人不会看这么长的开发信。

    2017-04-10
  • 小Lee
    小Lee

    英文表达不错,实践效果不知如何

    2017-03-31
  • Susan
    Susan

    若换成我是客户,我不会看完,那么长的开发信。。。。

    2017-02-16
  • lisa的大订单
    lisa的大订单

    只见推销,广告味太浓。修改一下会好一点

    2017-02-10
    邦号回复

    哪些地方要修改的,给个建议

    2017-02-10
  • 张子牧
    张子牧

    这个确实有点冗杂,英文的句式也是。当然有些运用的手法,针对不同的客户会有不同的效果,不过可以借鉴下。哈哈

    2017-01-23
  • CiCi
    CiCi

    略冗长 突出重点 有层次感条理分明 简短一点 会比较吸引眼球

    2017-01-21
  • MaShow
    MaShow

    别闹!这是最优秀的?

    2017-01-20
  • 金洋机械Alice
    金洋机械Alice

    这个太长了,效果不会太好吧

    2017-01-19
    邦号回复

    所以要看看你们不同意见呀

    2017-01-19
  • ERICYU
    ERICYU

    有点长,不知道客户是否有耐心看完?

    2017-01-19
  • 外贸搜索神器
    外贸搜索神器

    就是要听不同意见

    2017-01-19
  • sherrysong93
    sherrysong93

    太长了

    2017-01-19
  • Gemma
    Gemma

    会不会长了点呢

    2017-01-19
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